The Loss of a Wallet

[vimeo http://vimeo.com/111069322]

Critique:

There is an odd jump at the end and a weird turn in his head when reaching for the wallet. The facial expression is good; he looks sketchy. Hands should be on the hips, following the up and down flow of the hips. There is a decent change of pace from the beginning to the end. His knees bend outwards and there is too much movement in the knees. The hand, when he grabs the wallet should drag behind. The hand could remain flat on the table as opposed to lifting the wallet. The fingers could move more when he reaches for the wallet. The head moves too much, the movement should be more subtle. He should not look back until he has the wallet, to emphasize where the viewer’s eyes should be.

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